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    Challenge 7:: Run-on sentence

    Write a poem of about thirty lines that consists of a single sentence. Experiment with clauses and phrases and parallel structure. Try to keep the sentence moving forward, enjambing it across lines in different ways, while making sure it is grammatically correct. This type of exercise will help you develop flexibility as a writer, teaching you new ways to phrase things and new ways to play with the syntax of a line.

    As always feel free to post your work in Poetic Scriptures if you'd like some feedback, with the required two links of course.

    Have fun and be creative.
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    Re: Challenge 7:: Run-on sentence

    I have a grave addiction, diagnosed and all
    so get your own damn ideas from now on.
    Last edited by spokenoh; April 22nd, 2011 at 06:33 PM
    can I kick it?

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    Re: Challenge 7:: Run-on sentence

    Life is nothing but scattered souls
    searching for a purpose
    and I've yet to find mine
    feeling trapped in this meaningless existence
    like im still sleeping and my nightmare
    is someone else's dream
    ...I feel so handicap so manipulated like puppets
    on a stage only here for someone else amusement
    like celestial swords waging warfare within my soul
    I'm trying to break free
    a sheep that strayed from the herd
    never to be found again as I
    go down a path few dare to trend so now they
    say I am an outcast...who gives a fuck
    I don't want their false love anywhere near me
    swallowing me up like a blackhole with it's anti-gravity
    grasp that won't loosen so
    I...can't...breathe...
    a aging fragment of a lost time
    a souvenir of a road less traveled by
    a dying heartbeat of a breed now extinct I will become
    memories of a tragedy embraces my mind
    with cold hands
    enough to make anyone tremble
    but I won't no I can't
    for I must continue forward with
    my unquenchable thirst for peace
    within me as a reminder to others I will
    plague them like scars...
    like a weeping widow I walk alone in my sorrow.

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    Re: Challenge 7:: Run-on sentence

    ^ way to use multiple phrases and the diction I was using. Fucking retard.
    can I kick it?

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    Re: Challenge 7:: Run-on sentence

    Yooo dude, I just wrote anything that came to my mind, if I did take anything you say was your "phrases" or "diction" know it wasn't intentional. Now you calling me a fucking retard was uncall for, you could have just asked in a mature fashion. If you want I can rewrite it so you can feel better you know don't like anyone being sad or how about I delete it all together so you can be the only one with such original brilliance again, how that sounds?

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    Re: Challenge 7:: Run-on sentence

    different reasons why everyone becomes a fragment
    like a secret beneath dust and souvenirs
    slowly aging yellow.
    a aging fragment of a lost time
    a souvenir
    i think this is what he's talking about
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    fuck it, I didn't really sweat it. It was just weird that he used some of the same language I did within a few lines like I did.
    can I kick it?

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    Ooooo lolol wow I see what you mean, I really didn't do that intentionally at all my bad, pure concidence I assure you believe it or not. Still if you want I can rewrite that section.

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