Life is Hard (people dont understand)

I cant keep livin this artificial life, it just doesnt feel precise
Seems so trite, ecspecially the unconditional strife
Fells like someone just acquired a slice... of my heart
and it's just hard, because shit leaves me emotionally scarred
Fells like someone just took a shard... of steel
and tried to cut out these feelings I conceal, they won't understand because I'm so surreal
Because I'm like a dream people dont feel... my afflicT
They all just assume I'm a dick, it's not me it's all of this shit
They just dont know and so i predict... my life will remain this way
It's something i just cant seem to change, no matter how much i pray
or how much everyone tells me things will be okay... they won't, people gotta learn to accept
that they can't get me figured out because my minds adept, theres nights i havn't slept
Sometimes I laid awake in dismay and just wept... about things I have locked
inside my soul and I just blocked, if i told you them all they would leave you in cardiac shock
your mind would feel overstocked... with things that you couldnt have thought
could ever have brought me distraught

Heres my 2 links:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...00#post1881600

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...09#post1881609

I'm guessin everyones to good for me my shit must suck. for rel what does a white kid gotta do around here to get some feedback

This was alrite kid, i could feel wat u was saying but if u wanna get deeper express yaself more. ya flow could be better but u alrite i aint hating, check out my shit, its war child peace.

thanks man appriciate it much..ne 1 else gonna leave me some feedback?

nice
good flow
no bullshit
pretty fuckin good




nice sig

thanks man... yea my moms b/f made me that sig sweet huh lol can i get some more feedback?

i agre wit the fisrt dude....vocab was good and u had some multis but u could've expressed urself better than what u did. I feel as if this could've come out deeper than what it was....not sayin it wasn't good it just coulda been better.....Keep droppin kid.....Peaceezy.

yo, decent bars, but some of them did come off as simple, try and work on uppin your vocabulary, other than that i enjoyed it, and can yall leave some feed back on my peice... its called thy eye.... iigt man stay up, ~1~ easy

thanks for the tips n critique....and yea if ne 1 wants some feedback just leave me a link ill be happy to return the favor